What do you think?

Submitted by The_One on Tue, 09/13/2011 - 09:07

http://www.bodyinflation.org/node/25216

It's one of the first good ideas I had for a story that I have made a sequel for, which I will submit to this site at some point, but I just want a bit of feedback and criticism about this, as I'm working on the third part of this story as we speak. I'll ask for some follow-up ideas after I've posted the second one, although I'm happy to hear some now.