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08/27/2013

Expada-Con part 1

By Inflatable Dawn aka Dave-31

“Hello everyone! Dawn here, but you already knew that, welcome to this weeks entry of ‘The Dawn-ventures’ Yeah I know it’s still the dorkiest name ever.”

A young woman sat in front of her monitor, a soft smile on her face as she fussed with the web camera, trying her best to make it just right, but seeming to be struggling with it “D-damnit… Grr stupid belly!” she shouted as she knocked over her tri-pod where her camera was perched. Indeed the girl had a rather strange predicament, her mid-section was massively bloated. In fact she looked rather full all over minus her face.

“How the hell am I going to do this weeks show? I gotta’ keep up my quota or Tubeyou is gunna’ cut me off!” she stressed, a hand resting on her bellowing bust. She sighed softly, rubbing in small circles over her strange physic. It wasn’t a strange aliment or some unforeseen allergy; it was her first day at the new convention she had heard about. She stood up, or rolled up as it were, from the plush hotel bed. The large curve of her tummy starting from betwixt her breasts and rolling down well between her legs made it a bit difficult to move. But this did not deter the raven haired girl as she waddled over to her tripod and, with some difficulty, stood it back up.

“Alright, looks like I’m going to have to use the fucking remote” she sighed. Dawn prided herself on her ability to adapt to new technology, but sometimes things were a bit too complex for her, new video game consoles, digital televisions, the strange panties she was handed at cosplay check-in, and of course, the remote for her camera. Rolling back to her feet she made her way to her duffle bag and began to fish for the remote. She grumbled softly as she stretched her now comically short arms around the dome of her front. She cursed loudly as she tried to shift her self, spreading her thickened thighs to let more of her bloated crotch and tummy through to allow her greater access to her bags.

“There you are!” she shouted before blushing brightly “oh… Hi Oleg” she said meekly putting away her bright purple traveling ‘companion’. A minute more and she was successful. With a triumphant grunt she stood back up and waddled to her laptop, and tried again at her web show. Fixing her hair up into her traditional pigtails, wiping her face lightly as not to disrupt her make-up, and of course making sure she was decent for her audience she pressed the record button.

“Hello Fan world! It’s me, Inflatable Dawn, believe it or not… Wow what irony right?” she said softly, a blush on her cheeks as she patted her inflated sides awkwardly.

“Anyways, I’m coming to you all live here in rainyDetroitRockCityfor what is apparently the fifth annual Expander-Con. Oh sorry, Expada-Con. It may as well be the former though as you can see from my figure,” she sighed, a soft smile on her face and she slapped the side of her swollen breast making them wobble and shake. “Fan service for you; Anyways lemme’ tell you about the days events, but make sure your ready, it’s a dozy.”

With a jump cut, Expada-Con is seen being held at Calibo Hall. Hundreds of people are lined up outside with what looks like a beautiful red sky in the morning. Dawn having been raised by her grand-folks mumbled to herself an old saying,

“Red sky at morning, sailors take warning… Oh well at least there’s bound to be tons of stuff going on inside.” She said to herself as she stood up and began stretching. For the past 32 hours she had camped out in front of the main doors. With nothing but a ninja chair, a sleeping bag tent and her large duffle bags, she was ready to check in and have some fun. This wasn’t her first convention, she had been to others ever since launching her web series “Dawn-ventures” which chronicled her exploits at all the different conventions, gatherings, meetings, and what have you all around the country. She had become rather well known, thanks to her show, for her cosplay. Nothing extreme or over the top as some of the more famous and professionally paid models, but enough to get into places for free, or snag the goodie bags before anyone else. She loved her new life-style and it showed in her love of talking about it to the masses.

After finishing her breakfast bar, and chugging down the last of her morning slim fast, she brushed her long hair and pulled out her camera,

“Hello everyone! Dawn here! I’m standing outside of what I’m told is Expand-Con…what?” she said looking to someone off to the side,

“Oh, my bad, heh, Expada-Con, anyways it’s time for the main doors to be open and I am ready for a real bed, as you can tell I haven’t had very good nights out here,” she went on talking. After a few moments the line began to move. She gasped and kissed her fans goodbye before hauling everything to the registration desk. The hall was massive to say the least. Tall ceilings, wide staircases, and loads of booths filled her vision, she giggled excitedly, bouncing a little as she made her way up the line to the booth.

“Hello! Welcome to Expada-Con! Are you pre-registered?” a blue-haired girl dressed as Felicia asked, “If so please take the line on your right, if not, please form in an orderly fashion towards the ticket stand on the left behind me”

Dawn whistled softly she witnessed the line grow and grow within seconds after the announcement. She happily skipped to the line of the right. After her first convention trip she had learned to always pre-reg. least she be doomed to repeat the events of sore feet and aching back from standing in a line for ten hours. After a few minutes the line moved and Dawn was up front.

“Hello sweetie, what’s your name?” a woman dressed in a sexy military uniform asked.

“Dawn, That’s Dawn Po-“ she began, but was interrupted,

“Ah here you are! And you’re cosplaying as well right? Well then as you read in the agreement, you will be allowed to receive donations from fellow con-goers, all you need to do is sign here… And here… And here… And lastly here.” She said sweetly, her long red hair hung over her generous bust as she quickly looked over the documents.

“First time? Well then here, these are beginners” she said with a soft chuckle handing over a small black box. “Before entering the floor you’ll need to be wearing these, if you aren’t wearing them you won’t be allowed to receive any tips or donations.

Dawn Looked at the woman puzzled, this was the first time she had ever been to a convention where she was to be paid simply for being there. “Um… Thanks, what are they? Like a uniform or a badge?” she asked before being shooed to allow the ling to progress. Holding the box to her chest she walked over to the elevators. She looked around trying to see what exactly the theme of the convention was. Everything seemed rather generic though. Colorful banners, tons of merchants and some demo booths, nothing really out of the ordinary, except for the large dull colored balloons. It wasn’t out there for conventions to have them, but normally she saw ones in blue or pink or green, but these were rather dull compared to the other décor, being simple browns and cream colors.

Shaking off the need to over think why they had weird colored balloons, she chalked it up to lack of sleep. She smiled as she elevator door opened. She got a foot into the door before hitting a large, soft, and warm mass. “The hell is this?” she said shocked as she stumbled back, seeing a large white balloon with purple accents on it “the fuck? Did someone really cram one of those in an eleva-“

“Excuse me? Oh no did I bump into someone?” came a voice from behind the mass. “I’m so sorry if I knocked you over, it’s kind of’ hard to see around myself, heh first day and already getting a mass of donation” the sweet voice said as the wobbling mass squeezed out into the main floor. Dawn looked up in awe, that wasn’t some balloon it was a woman, a woman dressed like Milenna, but her body was huge and round.

“Um… n-nice… Um mid f-fatality costume” she choked as she tried to stand up “h-how did you make it look so life like?” she asked reaching a hand out and rubbing the front of the woman’s leotard. A soft meaningful coo escaped the woman’s lips as she held herself up “Mmm it’s not a mid-fatality, it’s just all the donations I made” she sighed happily. “And this is all me” she added proudly. She waddled a bit more showing her backside, the bottom half clung tightly to her fattened rump.

“This your first Expada-Con?” she asked honestly. They stared at each other awkwardly for what seemed like eternity before Dawn found her voice.

“Um... Y-yes… I-is this…Um” she stammered as she looked at the little black box. Her eyes were wide, a mix of fear but excitement, this was a new convention, and this was a new adventure… But this was insane! But she was tempted to try it, at least once. They did say she would be getting free money for it.

“What brand did you get?” the woman asked before reaching around her large belly and snatching the box “Pfft, really? These are for like the little tiny girls, you’re what five nine? Here, go to this booth, and ask for the ‘real deal’” she smiled “Take my voucher, and tell them Mars sent you,” she said as she reached into her expansive bust, pulling out a black slip of paper with what looked to be white lettering at a stylized bloated woman on it. “Oh speaking of, ‘Hello there, I’m Mars, pleased to meet you” she giggled, her green eyes sparkled slightly as she glanced over Dawns thick frame. “Mmm, you’ll make a fine Cos-flater.” She stated. “If you have any questions, or need help getting into the swing of things just find me, I’m insuite209.”

“Really? I’m in 210” Dawn replied with a faint smile. This was meant to happen she felt. “Well then guess we were destined to bump into each other… Hey what a minute” she said softly, squinting her eye lightly, a finger placed on the side of her chin,

“Aren’t you Inflatable Dawn on Tubeyou? I thought you look familiar, to think I would bump into you of all people,” she laughed heartily, her inflated form bouncing slightly.

“I-is that a bad thing?” Dawn asked worried arching her brow as she collected her things and walked closer to Mars. “Am I like… in trouble?”

“Trouble? Fuck no! I’m a fan of your show; I love how you do the little animations at the bottom. Sine you’re hear I just got to ask, the name… are you also into… you know?” she said pointing to her tummy. Dawns face grew bright red. The Native girl was embarrassed but nodded.

“Yeah, I’ve had a fascination with it for a while… Th-though never really acted on it outside of drawings or stuffing my clothes.” She said sheepishly. Mars giggled at her, finding this unseen shy behavior adorable. She reached out a hand and helped her with her luggage. “Well Dawn, Lets take you to your room first and then we can get you fitted up… Though it might be a tight squeeze… Do you mind?”

“Notatall!” she responded faster then she wanted too, her cheeks burning again. “Don’t worry, I wont squish you, on purpose at least,” Mars giggled as they climbed into the shaft. It was a rather snug, but nothing to uncomfortable. Dawn was off in her own world for a moment, this was all so much to take in, a convention based around inflation? Who thought of this? Who would have taken this seriously? She hummed to herself lightly, her hands timidly roaming on Mars’s tummy.

“So since this is your first time here, you should know that these elevators are for the men, and unpaid cos-players. This is most likely my last time I’ll be able to ride in these ones.” She stated as she cooed at Dawn’s rubbing “when you need to get back up top there are some special elevators on the east side of the hall. It’s quite a waddle, but its better then needed to have people pull your bloated ass out of these tiny things.”

“So why do you ride in these ones, if you think their too small?”

“Why else? I love to feel big. Outside of this I work as a receptionist. I’m not suppose to make an impression, I’m suppose to be small and out of the way so the clients can see the people they need too… I come here to let myself out and feel in control. Hence why I try to ride in the normal elevators as long as I can, ‘cus it makes me feel larger then life, too big to handle too-Oops!” she squeaked as her body began to groan slightly, her already large belly swelling bigger, “MMmphh… S-sorry about that, heh. Donations come in at random, I have my own share of fans too… and they love to see me large. Guess I’ll be showing you the freight elevators after all” she chirped happily.

“How are you? I mean I don’t wanna be rude but you’re so big” Dawn asked genuinely curious as she poked Mars’s side. It was firm but still had quite a bit of give. “Like is this all air or whatever?”

“Well it’s up to the people donating. It can be air, helium, water, or even blueberry juice, that’s a new one for this year, but it’s all up to them. I have my profile marked for only air as I’m not big on floating up to the ceiling and rather like my mobility, you know? You can get a mixture inside of you, and some girls love that, but I’m strictly air.”

“Profile, C-could you help me make one?” Dawn asked worried she was unaware of all of this till now.

“Er, well that was all meant to be done when you pre-regged sweetie. If you didn’t do it then… you’re open for anything” she said softly, putting a puffy arm around the smaller girls shoulder, “But hey! Learning experience, and everyone is super cool here, you’re in safe hands… just Um… stay away from Mardi Gra”

“Why?” Dawn asked, she had been to other events that she was assuming was the same, just with a different name, Mardi Gra, Sin night, All out, “Do bad things happen or popping?” she asked worried. “I go to Ragnorok for Dagorhir every year; they have a Mardi Gra where anything goes really”

“Well there’s no popping, but lets just say there is a lot of drinking and extreme tipping. My first time I was pretty much out of the convention for the entire weekend I was so huge, I was pumped far past what those little panties are suppose to do and found myself ‘owned’ by some weirdo”

“Owned? They have a slave auction?” She asked, still using terms familiar with her.

“No, no not a slave auction, it’s like a companion service, they auction you off, the money goes to the convention, and you spend the rest of the weekend with your buyer, you’re his companion, you can leave at anytime… granted you’re able to move under your own power. I was barely more then a ball with tits so I had to go everywhere with him… I’m just glad he wasn’t a super perv or anything. Not like I would agree to that anyways.”

This all made Dawn very nervous, but incredibly excited. A fantasy come true, fans, money. But at the same time, would she loose viewers? What would her friends at home think? Or her folks if they found out. And then there was this Mardi Gra, if it was anything like Ragnorok, she wanted to go, despite the risks. A brief moment later the two made it to their suites. Dawn gasped at the spaciousness of the room. “This is… This is all for me?” she asked openly, she spun around seeing it was a two floor loft with a nice window to the outside, now a soft grey as clouds formed overhead and the pitter-patter of rain hit the window.

“Yup, they give all the Cos-flaters the nice rooms since… well we tend to get really big one way or another. Ugh, I think I need to rest, and adjust myself” Mars said as she waddled over to a wide chair plopping herself down into it as she tried to reach under her ballooning belly. Dawn shook her head, she needed to unpack anyways, and having a new friend to answer questions was a pleasant plus in this new venture.

“So um… your friend at that booth?” she asked as she looked at the panties in the black box, noting strange little patches on the crotch and butt. “Do I really need that real whatever package?” she asked as she pulled out her costume. Nothing super fancy, but to her it was perfect, hand made be hers truly, it was a copy of a fallout raider outfit. Dusty tan daisy dukes, a white cropped tank top and combat boots, sprinkled with little bits of added flare such as pouches and bullet belts, she felt it was the best outfit she had for a new convention.

“Oh my, someone’s risky aren’t they?” Dawn heard Mars say behind her. “What do you mean?” she asked as she held up the outfit “It’s not that skimpy is it? I normally wear a nylon body glove with it so it’s not like anything’s gunna slip or whatever.”

Mars giggled “Sweetie, did you notice nearly all the girls are wearing one-piece outfits or something akin to them?”

“Yeees?” Dawn said slightly confused where this was going.

“It’s because they have a better chance at stretching and covering all of you, I have yet to see nylon anything last past the first few donations, and well… even though nudity is perfectly fine here, I’m not sure if you’re ready for that” she said as she looked over the outfit again. “If you get a white swim suit, it’ll work just as well. Tell ya what, I’m going to call my friend, get you those panties, and I’ll tell him to bring a ‘spanders swim suit as well.”

Dawn simply nodded, it wasn’t quite the same, but it would be better then being a huge helpless and naked ball, if that did happen. Mars chatted on the phone for a bit, she giggled enthusiastically, nodding franticly and agreeing with something. Dawn quizzically leaned in hoping to hear the other side of the phone, but heard nothing. Mars smiled happily as she snapped her phone shut.

“Alright, Jesse is bringing up your new stuff, lemme have that voucher back so I can give it to him, and he’s a real sweet-heart. Not to mention damn fine” she laughed as she waddled to the door. Dawn giggled along her as she went back to unpacking. It became muscle memory as she removed her other outfits for everyday use, which was looking like less and less of an opportunity if Mars’s growing figured was any indicator.

“So what do you do when you’re not a living balloon, Mars?” she asked as she plugged her phone and laptop into the wall as she flopped down next to her, she didn’t realize how much room she was taking on the couch, now feeling much more like a love seat as she felt her trim body pressed on hers.

“What do I do? Like besides my job? I mostly just hike explore and such, not much beyond that, don’t make too much where I work you know? What about you?” Dawn looked down at herself softly she really didn’t do much of anything outside of her channel, conventions and her Dagorhir games. Trying to think of something interesting she reflected on past work,

“Well I use to be a background extra till the movie industry packed up” Mars looked interested but before she could reply they heard a knock at the door. “Oh that must be Jesse, Think you can get it Dawn? I’m a little…. Big, ha” she chuckled defeated.

Dawn walked over to the door, as she moved closer she felt her heart race, each stepped make her shiver a little more. What’s wrong with me? She thought. It wasn’t like she was asking someone on a date or doing a photo shoot or anything, but the fact that on the other side of this door held the key to one of her fantasies. “Are you going to open it or stare at it?” she heard Mars shout from the couch. Dawn shook her head and opened the door. Greeting her was one of the most handsome men she ever laid eyes one, in her own opinion. He stood a head taller then her, ear length blonde hair cut into a bob, and piercing blue eyes, he had a slender near feminine build to him, but this added to his charm, so she thought.

“Hello there, you must be Dawn, right?” he asked, his voice carried a playful tone, one that could bring a smile to anyone’s face. Dawn could only stare at him. Every nerve in her body was stiff unable to make the final connection towards her dream. “Oh don’t mind her hun, come on in, It’s her first con like I said, she’s just nervous.” Mars cried out. Dawn shook her head, her raven pigtails fraying softly as she swallowed the lump in her throat “Hi” she croaked as she looked down at the floor.

“Hi Dawn, I’m Jesse, I brought these for you,” he said smiling handing her a purple box. “It’s the latest in inflate-wear and the groin in padded so if you’re waddling about outside…well, you know” he said with a soft chuckle. “Don’t want any of you guys chaffing” he added laughing louder as he let himself in. “so this is your first year, awesome, glad to be the one to pop your cherry,” he said nonchalantly. Seeing Dawn’s face his own cheeks reddened a tad. “Oh sorry, not like that I mean… Helping you with the convention” he said, a nervous twinge in his voice. “Not like… Sex. Anyways! Here let me set this to your account and then you can put them on” he said hoping to change the subject. Dawn was still red faced. She smiled weakly, mumbling what was most likely an okay as she tottered off to the bathroom.

As she stripped out of her black jeans she looked at the purple panties in the box, the crotch looked a little weird with the padding, but she was sure she’d be thankful for it at some point. She looked over her shoulder making sure she did in fact close the door before slowly sliding out of her current pair.

“So these will really make me inflate? And I’ll be paid for it too” she said to herself as she bent over, timidly stepping one leg at a time into them before sliding them up. They felt rather snug, but giving them a tug there was little resistance. Like some kind of space age material. She was amazed by them. She turned and faced the mirror over the sink and struck a few poses. She loved how they looked on her, even thought they looked like normal panties. She reached into the box and pulled out a small booklet, instruction no doubt.

“To activate crush pellets in front and back pads… yadda yadda yadda… To link with account… blah blah blah… Jesse knows this stuff, he said so” she said as she then undid her bra and slide into the white swim suit. It felt even tighter, but she figured it was to help keep everything contained when and if she began to expand. After a few moments of admiring her body she pulled her jeans back on and walked out, “How do I loo-whoooaaa!” she cried out seeing both Mars and Jesse giggling at her, Jesse had his hands on a cell phone and then she knew what was going on.

Her hands flew to her belly, she felt a cool sensation rush over her groin as a intense bloating sensation filled her middle. Her hands rubbed her belly slowly as she felt it growing. “whats… Happening?” she moaned out as she arched her back, watching her formerly flat tummy filling out the swimsuit and her jeans. Growing larger and rounder, pushing on the button of her jeans as they popped open. The sudden jolt resulted in her falling on her now slightly swollen rump as her tummy swelled larger. She moaned out louder, both hands on her tummy as it pushed her zipper down, the bathing suit accented her growing figure, making her look even larger. “Ooohhh Gods, H-how much… am I-“ she asked before gasping again as she felt her crotch swell a little larger before the sudden burst of inflation died down. She looked down, she had the body of an expectant mother. More so them a mother-to-be. She looked like she had inhaled a beach ball.

“That’s about 100 dollars there. Just a little thank you from my company for modeling our inflate-wear” Jesse said. Mars waddled over to the grounded girl and helped her up to her feet. Brushing her off softly she patted Dawns belly, sending thrills all over the girls body.

“Feels good right? Well you’re gunna have to learn to control that, if the people on the floor sense it’s your first time, you’re going to be a huuuuge hit.”

Suddenly Dawn appeared on the monitor again, A soft giggle escaped her lips as she rubbed the back of her head,

“OF course being my first time… Well… I’ve been at this hotel for a week now and I’m just now this small! They loved me and like mars said, they ate me alive! But then again seeing my bank account I cant really complain, Well that’s it for this episode, I’ll post more tomorrow, I got a special date with some friends, till next time!” she smiled before blowing a kiss. She went to stand up only to knock over her camera again,

“Damnit!”

Author's Note: 

This is my 2nd ever inflation story, the first one being for a high school class long ago. I tried to make an actual story with this but I feel I may have falling a bit flat. looking for constructive critisim. Hopefully you all will enjoy it and help me to make part 2 even better... also not a whole lot of inflation in this one yet.

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Yrrall_Dlok1
Would have liked a bit more

Would have liked a bit more time focusing on her inflation but otherwise it was pretty well done and paced

dave-31
I shall keep that in mind for

I shall keep that in mind for part 2

Thanks!

We Are Dawn...

airtankgirl5
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1. I liked it.  It didn't

1. I liked it.  It didn't really go in the direction that I would have taken it, but its not my story now is it? :)

2. Lots of typos.  t's a computer, it has spell check.  Typos are just an indicator of laziness. If you don't know a word, don't use it.  Likewise, just because you know a word, doesn't mean you should use it.  "Betwixt"?  Really?

3. Cosplay convention:  Cosplay=bad idea, convention=good idea.  The whole using pregenerated characters (or pregenerated character costumes in this case) is a really weak mechanism.  It shows a lack of creativity and committment. Again, lazy.  And when your audience doesn't know what character you are talking about, you lose them.

4. I didn't really understand how inflated underwear made one sensitive to touch. Maybe I just missed that part.

5. Very common to have the character secretly into inflation...though apparently not that secretly if she runs an online series under the name "Inflatible Dawn". 

6. PLEASE learn the correct format for writing dialogue!  And keep writing.

Despite all that, I still enjoyed it enough to read all the way through it, which rarely happens.

dave-31
Thanks for your reply, Sorry

Thanks for your reply, Sorry about the typos. I really should have re-read it when I was done, my appologies. I'm glad you still enjoyed it, I shall tweak it to make it better, as I said this is only my secound ever written story. and I did run the spell-checker.

I can see where the cosplay come into play here, I'll work on that in the 2nd part, granted enough people want me to even bother with it. Also what is a good way to do dialog? I was trying to make it eaiser to read as for me I get lost when dialog is mushed inbetween a paragraph, maybe I'm just weird and stupid, haha. 

Also the inflatable Dawn bit was more my fault on not making enough backstory, but I also didnt want to bore the more inflation wanting readers. It was more of a 'mash-two-words-together' type Screen name like some youtubers. Again In part 2 I shall expand the characters histories.

 

What are some good stories to read, in your honest opinion, that could help me improve mine?

We Are Dawn...

yeahshippo
Interesting concept.

Cosplay isn't a bad idea in the setting of a convention as its something common that happens so long as you note a clear difference between costume and actual physical attribute (i.e the blue haired girl in felicia either being a wig or a dye job). Outside of a setting where a costume would be acceptable it'd feel shoehorned in. Will you lose people when you say a Mileena costume? Yes but its a bit of the nature of the beast so if that's a worry focus more on other costumes that everyone knows (sexy military outfit was in your story for instance).

“Fan service for you; Anyways lemme’ tell you about the days events, but make sure your ready, it’s a dozy.” While dozy is a real word and will pass spell check the word you are looking for is doozy. I honestly think you need to run over your work once or twice to check for these kinds of mistakes since Mars isn't capitalized in places.

Elipses were really overused. They suited the situation during the inflation scene and the talk leading up to it but towards the beginning I think a few could've be cut out there are a few guides on what elipses are used for so I could be wrong.

I dunno this is what I got from a quick look.

dave-31
Also, thank you too!  I'm

Also, thank you too!

 I'm glad to be getting this much help. also thank you, I didn't know if it was one or two 'o's so thanks.

I do tend to over use elipses. not sure why. So I'll try to savor them for only the very special scene, and then only rarely use them.

And same for you, what stories, in your opinion, would help me the most to improve mine?

We Are Dawn...

Pablote
Loved it!  I really liked how

Loved it!  I really liked how you bookended the meat of the story with the 'present' and told it mostly in flashback.  I think you nailed the pacing really well, it didn't really "feel" like a fetish story; not to me anyways.  The setting combined with the protagonist's naivite make for a lot of wonderful places this story could go!

As for typos, I don't really give a crap.  Grammar and punctuation errors bother me, but not typos.  They're little slip ups.  If you want to avoid them in the future, I always find that re-reading the finished work aloud to myself helps me catch errors that I would have otherwise glossed over.

Anyways, this is the first really enjoyable piece of inflation fiction I've read in a good, long while.  Please continue with a part 2!

dave-31
Thank you for the kind words!

Thank you for the kind words! It means a lot. I plan on expanding (no pun intended) the plot and the characters more in the 2nd part, as well as having more inflation focus. So I hope you'll enjoy it once I finish it.

We Are Dawn...

fetishkitsch
I agree with everything

I agree with everything Pablote said!  This is a great story!

I too loved that it didn't feel like a normal fetish story, where you have your set points of: here's how you inflate, oh I'm inflating, and I'm inflated, end of story.  It feels like it's going to be a much longer and more public and interactive process which sounds way more interesting. 

Great job and I can't wait for you to write more!  

Also, yeah, don't worry about grammmer.  I'm sure if we all had editors looking over every word we write everything would come out much more polished, but we don't.  Actually now, quite a few self published novels that gain popularity and go into print have to be revised to fix mistakes by the original author.  So don't worry about grammer. 

hazard
Part 2?

When does part 2 get released?

Bigger and bigg...
Great Story only...

I like this story a LOT! but i would like to hear about dawns expirence at the convention. How big does she get? what happens? did she enjoy it? did she hang out with mars? these are some questions that could be answered by making a second part.