Hi all. I've decided to throw my hat into the writing ring, and I just posted my first piece on DA.
Here's a link: http://fav.me/d7azxn6
I'd love to know what you all think of the subject matter, of the writing, and any tips to do better next time! I'd be open to ideas as well, though I love explosive endings.
I hope to get much better at this and contribute some nice content!
Thanks, I'm not up for (or appreciate) really long pieces. Perhaps as I get a bit more experienced I'll attempt to explore more character and plot, but for now I'm striving to describe the inflation and popping in a coherent way.
Thank you, the popping is the crucial bit for me! And like my forum topic, I do like a bit more after the ending.
Your assumption is quite likely to be correct!
I look forward to reading future stories :)
http://fav.me/d7bzsjr
My second story. I thought it was a fun idea.
I like the length you get your stories down to. It's a different dynamic to what you get with longer stories, you can enjoy it almost as easily as you can enjoy a picture, they're very much like that. I read it a few times :)
It's an exciting little scenario, I like the little touches around what popping actually means in this case. She wants to burst but she still tries to keep it together, wanting and not wanting something at the same time; and to her employers this is just seen as losing a performer; and then the hoses just left hissing on their own once she'd blown.
That very last bit where he turns down the scraps and the host puts them in the bin as well, I quite liked that, is that something that turns you on in particular? Her just getting swept into the bin :)
As a writer and reader, I prefer shorter stories than epics. Much easeir to enjoy.
Yes, as we've talked about, popping is kind of an interesting subject. A combination of snuff, sadism, masochism, and lots of ways of approaching it! Perspectives make things much more interesting.
Yes, the objectification and the "scrap" is a big turn on for me. All in all, the attitude of not caring, or caring a lot, or even obssessing over the ruined scraps of an inflatee is hot.
I like it too, I've a particular thing for where her shoes are still in the place she was standing when she exploded, in partially ruined state and perhaps with smoke rising from them; though this isn't in every single story I do, other personal effects too which hint at the disappearance of a girl, or her reduction to debris are fun, things she was carrying, items of jewellery etc. You could have people helping themselves to valuable artefacts and suchlike.
New one's up!
I've decided to change the scene, but is still in the general realm of what I've been working in. It's a practicing story.
http://fav.me/d7cowqg
This is my favourite story.
Gosh, only now I found this topic. I hope you're still in one piece, alive and kicking, just busy. Wish you well, take care!
Read your stories, and I very much like them, Party Favour in particular. Not exactly how I vision inflatable girls, but still very hot!
Been a while!!!!! But whipped up a new one!!!!
http://fav.me/d7n3mt1
OMG, I've got 5, no, 4 minutes left. So many things to do! - It's the attitude I find very sexy in this one.
New inflation story! Spherical pregnant and air inflation to popping!
http://fav.me/d7ny9hl
You're doing great, hope you're up for more writing in the future
I liked it, you got the length and the pace just about right, and while some more description of what it felt like and looked like might have been nice, what there was was good. The explosion was done in a 'fun' way that hit all the right notes with me, and I liked the little aftermath with the scraps, and her boyfriend's attitude.
i can only assume the extra people who turned up were fetishists.