Happy Holly Days

I've purged the queue of pending stories, and Happy Holly Days is now online. I posted a comment on DA, I'll repost here (complete with typo corrections):

The word that came to mind when reading this was "Wordsmithery." Yeah, I know it's not a real word, but I tend to take a bit of license with the language.

I enjoyed this story immensely. It's the inflation fetishist's version of fanservice. You have the shy lab geek and the eager seductress drawn together by the miraculous substance that makes inflationists' dreams come true. But such a unrealistic scenario could have easily fallen flat.

This is where wordsmithery comes in. Anyone can verb a subject to an object and throw in a few adjectives as embellishment, but few can actually craft the text. What makes the story work is how the style matches the content. The premise is comical, but so is the execution. The silliness isn't a failing of the author, it's the delibrately crafted design of the story.

The dialog as well as the narration are lighthearted, entertaining, and as fanciful as the subject matter. Thanks to the smooth flowing witty banter, Holly is established as being willful and reckless, but she has a mind and motivations. She's not just some dumb bimbo who didn't read the instructions.

My favorite phrase in the story: "She adjusted her dress to accentuate her positives."

Consensual inflation has definite advantages. If you manage to pull it off you have a situation where you character isn't just willing but potentially enthusiastic about inflating. And I think a lot of us fantasize about being with a woman who's getting huge and is excited about it.

It's the recurring dilemma of the inflation author: You have the hot woman and you have the tank of inflationary gas, now how do you bring them together? Making it happen in such a way that she convincingly wants to inflate is pretty difficult and requires the establishment of either an extraordinary character or an extraordinary situation. But if you manage it, you can much more easily transition into one of the few scenarios even better than a woman inflating: a woman inflating who wants to engage in hanky-panky:)

Too many authors stumble over the first part, which devalues the second part. Sometimes when reading a story I find myself thinking something along the lines of "Why on earth is she putting that hose in her mouth?" Often it's glossed over. Either she's dumb and doesn't fully realize the implactions of what she's doing or somehow manages to accidentally inflate herself, which makes the subsequent interactions less satisfying. If you don't buy into why she'd inflate in the first place, it only becomes less believable if she's suddenly and inexplicably made horny by the result.

This only makes it more impressive when someone sets up a scenario where he can persuade the reader that the inflated kinkiness is desirable and not just because of the inflatee's mental defect.

Hey Inflate123, Just read your story a day or two ago, and very awesome work. you have some real charatization in your story, and it does'nt seem unreasonable, like in other stories, that the girl is excited about getting bigger. That is the big problem in stories, at least I've notices in the ones I've written, Why would a girl enjoy inflating like a balloon? You answer that very very well, and I look forward to reading your next story in 2008 :-D See ya later!

Dragon6860

My stories have always been at least a year or so apart, so I can't really comment on that. ;P

Overall,I enjoyed it very much. I think the story did what all these kind of stories are supposed to do, it created an...arousing situation with just enough believability to draw the reader in. Not only that, even devoid of my inflation bias, it was well written to boot!

hi, i'm a little (make that a lot) nervous to be posting here; i've been searching the circuit for a long time and i have written a fair few stories but i havent been able to get the acess to upload them (internet trouble) and i'm amaxed to bee posting in the same place as the top names in your feild...