Writers' Guild: No Accident and No Emergency
Yey I finally wrote a story so I can into this writer's guild thing. Although the guild seems to be floundering somewhat :(
You can find it here 'No Accident and No Emergency'.
Opinions and constructive criticism please :P
For "No Accident and No Emergency", I thought this was a very well written story, and did a very good job at getting a sence of tension, heh, although i knew she was probaly going to pop anywho, knowing your style :-D The growth scenes were very well done, and very descriptive. Dialoge was very good, it sounded very realistic. As a side note, the thing the girl said, "six" something, was a great touch, it makes me want to read the next one if there's gonna be a series or anything like that. Very good job, heh, even if i don't like popping, It's a very very good story.
Technical
Spelling - 100%
Grammer - 100%
Sentence Structure - 100%
Artistic
Subject - 80%
Plot - 95% The tension was very good, and the part of an explination was a great little cliffhanger.
Originality - 90%
Character Development 72% Again, the hint about future stories makes some development, but it's not a long story, so there's not a huge amount of develiopment for the charaters.
No, I would not want to live in a world without dragons, as I would not want to live in a world without magic, for that is a world without mystery, and that is a world without faith.