I do agree it can improve, but I liked the color and effects. It was the shape I wasnt crazy about.
New Style
I have noticed that the reception for my latest comic 'The 15 minute girl' (on this site and on carnatic.deviantart.com) has been a bit on the lukewarm side. So it involved two things that I've never done before and I was wondering which of them (or both) it was that people didn't like... and whether they still liked the other new thing.
The two things are:
1) The style of drawing... instead of simply colouring over the pencil sketch and making hte colour transparent, I inked and coloured the whole thing then removed the pencil sketch. I've been told that the colouring looks too flat and that the text looks too neat.
2) The shape of inflation... I don't like to draw the same shape of inflation twice, or I end up with just the same girl over and over again but with a different face. But I found that that was what I was starting to do. So I tried just inflating her torso, but most responses have said they'd prefer to see her hips and legs inflate too.
So what I want to know is, do both these ideas need to be scrapped or is it just one that's causing people to not like this cartoon so much.
Sat, 11/18/2006 - 03:42
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darth_clone19
Sat, 11/18/2006 - 10:45
#4
i think its much better than the other ones( style) cause of the coloring, but since its your first, sure it needs work, but i find your new style more proffetional looking, and i must say it simply looks cool.
you ll need to but more dimension effects in there though: lighting, more shades n stuff.
it looks alittle static,she always seems to be in the same position, but the torso is well inflated, you managed that well.
just continue, the colors look great, the writting as well, i like it.
Sat, 11/18/2006 - 15:26
#5
It's in my expirence that switches to new style overall usually start out with lukewarm responses. It sometimes has to do with you switching from something established that people already liked, to something they aren't familiar with seeing coming from you.
It can also produce a lukewarm response because, normally, the immedeat production quality isn't as high as most would hope, because the new style needs adjustments and fine tuning.
With that, I'll do a little critique:
- Your shading deffinitely doesn't come through very well, besides the actual characters shadow on the floor. Everywhere else is too light to really be recognized.
- The outline itself is still kinda messy, though I won't harp on this very much, cuz we all gotta find our own way around that.
- She is very static. It's pretty much the same pose, just different arm positions each time.
- This is just a pet peeve of mine, but her boobs are way to high up on her torso. Breasts do not form out of a females shoulders.
- On body shape: This is not exactly me talking, but my expirience from hearing other people's comments here, and to my stuff, and in forum posts, etc. If you ignore the feminine curve, people seem to not like it very much. Case in point, my pastry comic I did awhile back, it got alot of attention on DA, but the biggest comment I recieved back on it was how the body shape (the perfect sphere) was not desirable. You ignored the hips and butt, and those have a big following. I'm not going to discourage you from trying different things, in fact i encourage it, this is just a heads up in regards to observations within the community.
My best advice is to just stick with it, and try to make it work. That's it. :P
-AWN
Far be it from me to criticize an artist when I can barely draw stick figures.
BUT:
I would say both of your assertions are correct, in my opinion. It does look very flat and rough due to the thick outlines. The inflation shape isn't very convincing to me. And overall, it conveys a lack of detail and charm that was present in your other works. I guess the word I would choose would be "artificial".
That said, I commend you on trying something new. I think certain elements of this style could be refined and improved upon, but by and large I think your older work is better.
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