My first story

Hi,
This is my first story ever, and probably my last. I really just wanted my ideal inflation down on paper, so I decided to give it a go. any comments would be greatly appreciated!

Here are some notes before the read:
Breast Inflation
Butt Inflation
Full Body Inflation

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/58517054/

P.S. I submitted a rough (older) version of this story here a few days ago, but it hasn't been accepted yet.

Inflate123
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Why your last? I really liked what I read. It was a straightforward story/scenario, but with good pacing, clear details, and good spelling. :)

nje2000

Thanks for the comments inflate123! your video site actually got me into the community!

I decided to write a second story after all! I'd love any comments!

http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/59401195/

Heres what it has:

Breasts
Butt
Body
Popping (not too gory).