Just Between Friends

This is a short little inflation story I wrote a few months back, after being inspired by a piece of artwork I found on DeviantART. It's short and silly, but will hopefully serve as a stepping stone towards bigger and better things (no pun intended). I've been wanting to contribute to the community in the form of stories for several years now, but I'm still uncertain about the quality of my writing. I'm basically looking for constructive criticism and feedback to help me get a better idea of where my strengths and weaknesses, so that I can improve on future works.

My story "Just Between Friends", can be found here: http://phraxus.deviantart.com/art/Just-Between-Friends-83015203

Thanks for your time.

- Kurg (aka Phraxus)