This is actually quite good! I especially liked the ending, where Alan gets served for being such a jerk.
Great work!
This is actually quite good! I especially liked the ending, where Alan gets served for being such a jerk.
Great work!
Your writing style is fine. I don't really get the storyline, why are they inflating her. Why was she smashed over the head. It didn't seem to add anything. How come she is being filled with water, yet becomes lighter? I don't like that she starts spewing water. I think you're doing way too many polls at the moment, they're getting a little tedious. Having said that I've not bothered to vote in any of them.
I think the descriptions are well written. At one point you call Kim, kin.
Your writing style is fine. I don't really get the storyline, why are they inflating her. Why was she smashed over the head. It didn't seem to add anything. How come she is being filled with water, yet becomes lighter? I don't like that she starts spewing water. I think you're doing way too many polls at the moment, they're getting a little tedious. Having said that I've not bothered to vote in any of them.I think the descriptions are well written. At one point you call Kim, kin.
Ah, I see. If you look at the second paragraph and fourth paragraph, it might explain why Julie gets inflated and how Julie got smashed on the head.
From Second Paragraph.
[She hears a feminine voice said, “Don’t worry about the guests; we made sure that they don’t see you. Remember your promise?†Julie responds, “The promise? Oh yeah, that promise…] That shows that she made a promise to Alice that she'll inflate herself.
From Fourth Paragraph.
[Julie suddenly remembers the whack in the head and asks, “Alice, who whacked me in the head earlier?†Alice answered, “It was my little sister. Remember her?†Julie respond, “Madison? I remember her trying to kill me for “making women look bad.†She is nuts!†Alice replies, “Yeah, she is the psycho of the family of course.â€Â] That means Alice's Little Sister, Madison was trying to kill Julie, but failed because Alice knocked her out after she smashed the wine bottle on Julie's head.
Water Inflation by a Gardening Hose was chosen because Alice and Kim did not bring anything to inflate Julie with. Not even a Helium Tank. I would do a Helium Inflation, but look how common that method was. So I look for alternatives to keep the series "out of the crowd."
Actually, she does not get lighter. Why would I be that careless to get Water and Helium mixed up after all the experiences I got so far? Look at these 2 pieces.
Paragraph 6
[She begin to feel the weight of her growing water balloons and slowly starts to stagger as she tries to keep herself standing with the water’s weight that grows inside of her.]
Paragraph 7
[Without warning to Alice and Kim, Julie falls backward by the weight of the water in her.]
and by the rope tied between her ankle and anchor, Julie's growing spherical body eventually rolls her back upright in Paragraph 8.
Yeah, she did spew some water, but think about it. Add a bit of real life physics of force of the water rushing through. But at least she starts holding them in afterward. Be glad that I don't like orgasm. Even that turn me off. >.< *shivers a bit by the image*
I'm glad that you pointed out. All I'm really asking is there something wrong. ^_^
For the polls, I'll stop. Got bored with those already.
about that one point, I have to wear glasses all the time and it is indeed the summer from where I live, I tend to lose focus and miss some typos.
Anyhow, let me explain Julie Basket.
Julie Basket is a fictional character who I created for this story and the future stories that can only be found in this site due to complications with other sites like Writing.Com. She... let us say she has an odd history that'll explain how she can get big, how come she cannot burst, and many more. Much like us, she loves inflation. Unlike us, she is crazy enough to take the Wonka Gum. But she is after all a fictional character, she can go nuts and go as far as I can allow her. (Like you and the community, I have limits in taste.)
Go to "News from uhcm" Topic in Writer's Den to ask me questions involving the Julie Basket Series or my methods of story writing. You can ask me from "What's Julie's favorite color?" and "Why there is little cuss or no cuss?" to "What is her purpose for the series?" and "Why not using the common air tank?", I'll answer when I can.
I'll be glad to answer if any of you got questions about my style of writing and Julie Basket Series. :wink: I find it refreshing to read a compliment, a criticism and a question.
I must have got confused by the bit about her feet lifting off the ground and having a rope tied to her. Just adding 2+2 really.
I still don't get why anyone would promise to be inflated on their wedding day?
I noticed in my story that just got added up, that I called Cinderswella the princess at one point! So not the only one making that mistake!
:lol: Good to hear. A lot of our characters are weird, it what makes them unique.
Julie Basket is the only lass who can inflate herself in many important events, if she can escape em first. :lol:
If I can get to it, Julie Basket can even inflate herself during her own birthday. BUT! I'm not using the common ideas like the Helium Tank or Air Tank. I'll be using them later for future stories when the situations are not as common as I can see em. :wink:
*uhcm looks around for inspirations* Hmm... *uhcm begin to listen to Metallica: Master of Puppets* Aha! New Idea! *uhcm rushes out of the room... and returns with a goblet of diet pepsi* I was thirsty.
I'll be honest, your use of the present tense in the story really threw me off. I don't think I can really judge the story fairly as a result.
I'll be honest, your use of the present tense in the story really threw me off. I don't think I can really judge the story fairly as a result.
I put it in present tenses for giving the readers the particular feeling that they are with Julie, Alice and Kim the whole time. Kinda like the Cameraman's Point of View. I was planning on making the third person beginning then a switch to a Semi-Second Person (from one of the character's point of view) then in next episodes, I'll make it Full Second Person, putting you and the other readers into the action. So I mainly do present tenses to project the feeling that you are with them.
Fukureru-Shogun wrote:
I'll be honest, your use of the present tense in the story really threw me off. I don't think I can really judge the story fairly as a result.I put it in present tenses for giving the readers the particular feeling that they are with Julie, Alice and Kim the whole time. Kinda like the Cameraman's Point of View. I was planning on making the third person beginning then a switch to a Semi-Second Person (from one of the character's point of view) then in next episodes, I'll make it Full Second Person, putting you and the other readers into the action. So I mainly do present tenses to project the feeling that you are with them.
I suppose I am hopelessly trapped by convention. Write in the manner you are most comfortable, I just wanted to give you feedback.
Hate to tell you, but, I think its rather bad. If I can't read past the first paragraph, then I don't think that its worth reading.
The thing that killed it for me was when she got wacked over the head with the wine bottle and didn't even feel any after pain later. I mean, if you got hit hard enough to get knocked out, I would bet that after you came to, you wouldn't feel like laughing at someones rather lame joke. (I know from experience that getting hit in the head by something hard stings for quite a while, and you are never in a mode for laughter). Course, I understand that this is an inflation story, but, some things in it still need to have some realism to them.
And I can't begin to critique your grammar and misuse of words. I have too much of my own stuff to work, so I don't have the time to waste on telling someone something that they already should know.
Also, I think the name Julie Basket is a ridiculous name, but, thats just my personal point of view.
Normally I would have kept this to myself, but since you so badly desire feedback...
I'm gonna have to side with the Archangel on this one.
I'll start with the things you did right... the description of the inflation itself was decent, if maybe a little labored. And Julie went spherical, which is my personal preference for inflated girls.
Now then, to the bad...
1. The story weaves in and out of present and past tense, either recklessly or accidentally. Either way, it is annoying to read.
2. There are numerous grammar mistakes.
3. Mundane details not important to the story are best left in general terms. e.g. "after 20 seconds of gathering", "after 10 seconds", "under 3 seconds", "after 4 seconds". Nobody cares if it was 4 seconds instead of 7, and the raw numbers only serve to make the story more esoteric than it needs to be.
4. Perhaps even worse than the grammar mistakes is the lack of separation between dialogue and narrative and, as a result, the length of the paragraphs. It is almost impossible to tell at a glance if anyone is talking and, if someone is, who. Reading the story feels like visually wading through a word soup.
5. Water does not hiss.
6. Beyond all the technical stuff... I just didn't get the story. There's not really anything wrong with a lack of a backstory and little explanation of the characters, but the story and plot should at least have some other redeeming characteristics to make up for that. I can't really find any. The plot seemed random and forced, and your responses to swella's questions don't really answer the same questions I have, and actually raise more questions.
For example, I was trying to figure out the whole bottle-across-the-head thing. Ok, so she got whacked by the bottle. Why? Oh, a couple paragraphs down I read that the little sister tried to kill her. Oh, and that's because she's psychotic. Beginning to make sense, except... why is she psychotic? What does she have against Julie? Why is any of it relevant to the story? This is just one of several random elements in the story that left me thinking "huh?", and as the head-scratching elements started piling up I began to lose interest.
By the way, I'm not entirely sure you understand what second person POV is. There is no "semi"-second person; your explanation of it is just first person with another character narrating the story. And if I may offer some advice: please, for the love of God, don't write in true second person. As a reader, being told what I am doing/seeing/thinking in the story is aggravating and limits the imagination of the events that are transpiring. Besides, there is a reason that second person is very rarely used in literature - it is very difficult to write in a way that's believable. To be honest, I don't think you're talented enough to pull it off.
Overall, I give it a 2 out of 5.
Normally I would have kept this to myself, but since you so badly desire feedback...I'm gonna have to side with the Archangel on this one.
I'll start with the things you did right... the description of the inflation itself was decent, if maybe a little labored. And Julie went spherical, which is my personal preference for inflated girls.
Now then, to the bad...
1. The story weaves in and out of present and past tense, either recklessly or accidentally. Either way, it is annoying to read.
2. There are numerous grammar mistakes.
3. Mundane details not important to the story are best left in general terms. e.g. "after 20 seconds of gathering", "after 10 seconds", "under 3 seconds", "after 4 seconds". Nobody cares if it was 4 seconds instead of 7, and the raw numbers only serve to make the story more esoteric than it needs to be.
4. Perhaps even worse than the grammar mistakes is the lack of separation between dialogue and narrative and, as a result, the length of the paragraphs. It is almost impossible to tell at a glance if anyone is talking and, if someone is, who. Reading the story feels like visually wading through a word soup.
5. Water does not hiss.
6. Beyond all the technical stuff... I just didn't get the story. There's not really anything wrong with a lack of a backstory and little explanation of the characters, but the story and plot should at least have some other redeeming characteristics to make up for that. I can't really find any. The plot seemed random and forced, and your responses to swella's questions don't really answer the same questions I have, and actually raise more questions.
For example, I was trying to figure out the whole bottle-across-the-head thing. Ok, so she got whacked by the bottle. Why? Oh, a couple paragraphs down I read that the little sister tried to kill her. Oh, and that's because she's psychotic. Beginning to make sense, except... why is she psychotic? What does she have against Julie? Why is any of it relevant to the story? This is just one of several random elements in the story that left me thinking "huh?", and as the head-scratching elements started piling up I began to lose interest.
By the way, I'm not entirely sure you understand what second person POV is. There is no "semi"-second person; your explanation of it is just first person with another character narrating the story. And if I may offer some advice please, for the love of God, don't write in true second person. As a reader, being told what I am doing/seeing/thinking in the story is aggravating and limits the imagination of the events that are transpiring. Besides, there is a reason that second person is very rarely used in literature - it is very difficult to write in a way that's believable. To be honest, I don't think you're talented enough to pull it off.
Overall, I give it a 2 out of 5.
At least someone was brutally honest without being too personally focused.
This story is in Third Person. I did said something about Second View but it was for future stories, but I was stuck in a decision to stick with the third person or switch over to second person (easier for me.) Anyhow for this story, it is all Third Person. Future stories are the ones going Second Person.
for Madison Fellowmen (Alice's Little Sister), here is the explanation that I should have added but it might killed the progression and hardly had the time to do so.
The psycho girl was trying to kill Julie Basket because she believes that Julie was making women look bad. In the past, she used to be harmless, but add the build up on experiences with hate over the years and here is the result, obsession. It is coincidence that it happens to be a Wedding Day and Alice's family was invited; that means the psycho girl is invited with the family. Plus, that girl will appear in later stories.
True that water doesn't hiss, but think about the faucet. The two words, Garden Hose might have struck up a common sense. Water does not hiss, but the faucet makes a hissing noise when pressured water is being released. How about this, go outside, open the valve on your outdoor faucet that you use for the hose; it makes a hissing noise and when the hose is applied, the hissing gets the deeper tone.
See my point?
By the way, at least I wrote something instead of saying that I'm a writer and not write something. I mainly do the Second Person Perspective in Writing.Com, so I might as well apply it to the later episodes in this site.
Either way, sounds like I either need more practice.
Oh yeah! If you all haven't noticed, I tend to challenge people's logic.
By the way, Archangel. You think Julie Basket is a ridiculous name? Think about Charlie Bucket, Verruca Salt, Mike Teevee and Augustus Gloop. To be honest, I got the name, Julie Basket from the name, Charlie Bucket. Here is the comparison.
Julie Basket
Charlie Bucket
You may ask more questions at "News from uhcm" Thread. I made it specifically for series related questions, character questions or ideas and references that may interest me.
This story is in Third Person.
I get that. I was responding to your comment about planning to use "semi-second person", and your explanation of it wasn't second person at all.
for Madison Fellowmen (Alice's Little Sister), here is the explanation that I should have added but it might killed the progression and hardly had the time to do so.The psycho girl was trying to kill Julie Basket because she believes that Julie was making women look bad. In the past, she used to be harmless, but add the build up on experiences with hate over the years and here is the result, obsession. It is coincidence that it happens to be a Wedding Day and Alice's family was invited; that means the psycho girl is invited with the family. Plus, that girl will appear in later stories.
Makes a little more sense, but without the explanation it would've been better to just leave out the bottle/psycho/murder stuff and come up with another reason for Julie and her friends to be alone.
True that water doesn't hiss, but think about the faucet. The two words, Garden Hose might have struck up a common sense. Water does not hiss, but the faucet makes a hissing noise when pressured water is being released. How about this, go outside, open the valve on your outdoor faucet that you use for the hose; it makes a hissing noise and when the hose is applied, the hissing gets the deeper tone.
I am familiar with that sound, I just don't consider it a "hiss". But that's neither here nor there. Agree to disagree.
By the way, Archangel. You think Julie Basket is a ridiculous name? Think about Charlie Bucket, Verruca Salt, Mike Teevee and Augustus Gloop. To be honest, I got the name, Julie Basket from the name, Charlie Bucket. Here is the comparison.Julie Basket
Charlie Bucket
To be fair, they are all ridiculous names, but they were intended to be so.
Im just curious whats with all the gobbledy gack inbetween most of the words cuz that makes it even harder to read than what double and archangel are making it out to be.
Not to come off as rude or demanding but it just makes it very hard to read w/out copy pasting into a document and snipping out what looks to be code for fonts on in word documents
[Author Notes: I had trouble with the emailing bit so I bring the story to the forum ~~ uhcm]
Warning: This story contains Sexual References of a fetish and sex, Adult Themes relating to naughty mentioning and underwear, and Violence by a psycho girl with a wine bottle. This is an inflation story, so it is a fetish/fiction, not non-fiction. Adaptation of this story require permission from uhcm or a signed contract that allows you to perform without permission.
Thank you and Enjoy.
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Julie Basket and the Big Wedding By uhcm
The vows had been spoken and lips touched. Organ blew its pipes as it plays the finishing etude. The groom, Alan Stitch led the bride, Julie Basket through the aisle and out the doors. Alan noticed Julie was oddly excited and asked her to set off her excitement in her dressing room. They kissed and Julie dashed to her dressing room. The wedding gown almost tripped Julie but she caught herself and enters the dressing room like she was chased by a psycho, holding her belly like she had ran a fifty yard sprint. She looks around inside her dressing room and noticed a bottle of wine sitting at a table near the tall mirror. Julie thought to herself, “…A wine bottle?... For me?... Maybe later, this corset is killing me!...†She walks and drops onto the chair and loosens the corset. She slips the corset out from underneath her dress. Julie breathes heavily and thought to herself, "I’m excited eh? Try to wear a corset under that tuxedo…" She rests as she tries to get her breathing back in track. While she just got her breathing back, she heard something move and darts a glance at the table. The wine bottle was missing. Julie asked, “Anyone here?†She suddenly felt a blunt hit the back of her head leading with a loud glass bump sound. She lost sight and the will to react.
Julie wakes up but her sight was blurred. She was weak but she knows that she is lying on her back outside of the church. She hears a feminine voice said, “Don’t worry about the guests; we made sure that they don’t see you. Remember your promise?†Julie responds, “The promise? Oh yeah, that promise… what about Alan?†Julie’s eyesight clears up and she sees her old friend, Alice (age: 21) from the cheerleader squad. Alice answers, “Alan the groom? He is busy with the toilet thanks to Kim’s oldest prank.†Julie can’t help but laugh about her husband’s predicament. She moves her right leg and felt a tug. She looks and sees her right ankle was tied to an anchor by a few feet of rope. She asked, “Afraid that I’ll move?†Alice and Kim (age: 20) laugh and Alice answers, “Yeah. There goes the bride if you move while going up.†The three giggle about Alice’s humor. Julie gets up and brushes herself, saying, “Well, which one and where shall it go?†Alice holds up a garden hose that is attached to the faucet beside the church and said, “Up between the legs please.†Julie responds, “Okay. Good thing I made my dress and my underwear customized to stretch; even though I didn't wear my bra.â€Â
Alice passes Julie the garden hose and Julie takes it. Julie calmly gathers her dress’s skirt; after twenty seconds of gathering, Alice and Kin can see her red silk panties with a black heart on the middle of the front. Kim asks, “Expecting the cheap hotel with Alan?†Julie blushes when Kim asked that; Alice and Kim giggles like high school girls gossiping about a football player. Julie said, “Laugh it up, you might miss this.†Kim and Alice laugh as they take a seat. Julie fingers her panties and tugs it aside. She gently raises the hose close up to her. As the nozzle touches her, she quickly jolts it back with a yelp from the cold aluminum nozzle. She takes a deep breath and tries again; it’s in. She gasps and blushes as if she was already at the cheap hotel, but without her newly wedded husband. She pushes the hose deeper but it got stubborn, so she pulls it a bit and pushes it in again. She makes repetitive gasps as she tries to get the hose deep enough. After ten seconds, Julie lets go of the hose and skirt as she sighs with relief. The hose refuses to hit the ground; all Alice and Kim sees is Julie standing with arms spread out in her wedding gown and a hose lying on the ground and suspends after going under the skirt.
Julie puts her hands together, held in front of her pelvis, and tilts her head to the right and smiles. Julie gladly asks Kim, “Kim? Can you let it flow, dear? My body is quite thirsty.†Julie suddenly remembers the whack in the head and asks, “Alice, who whacked me in the head earlier?†Alice answered, “It was my little sister. Remember her?†Julie respond, “Madison? I remember her trying to kill me for “making women look bad.†She is nuts!†Alice replies, “Yeah, she is the psycho of the family of course.†Julie asks, “What happened to her?†Alice laughs and answers, “I knocked her out and give her to mom. I told her that she was sleeping.†Julie laughs and signals Kim to go on. Kim gets off her chair and walks over to the faucet casually. Kim grips the faucet and looks at Julie. Kim said to Julie, “If you are ready, straighten up; we want it to be a good show. Not like you failed us before.†Julie puts her legs together, feeling the hose up between her legs. She then puts her arms straight beside herself, she is ready. Kim opens the valve on the faucet and runs back to her chair; the show has begun.
Julie hears a deep hissing from the hose as the water was released. Under three seconds, she felt the hose jolts and a second later, she the cold water entering her. She shivers for a short while as the cold water flows inside her, filling her. The hissing began to be heard from her tightening belly; it sounds deeper than what came from the hose. She felt the water escaping out of her and down her legs, making her close her legs tighter. She felt the water shoot up her throat and she made a light spill of water out of her mouth. She shut her mouth and forces the water down her throat. She begins to feel the tingling from her breasts and her ass. She looks down and notices her breasts are rounding out and tightening. She turns her head and notices her ass is tightening up from a well shaped to a well rounded. Julie begins to groan with pleasure as her body began to tighten by the filling water. The water began to force Julie’s body to accept its constant flowing content.
Julie puts her hands on her belly and feels it starting to bulge out slowly. After four seconds, Alice and Kim begin to notice the bulging as Julie’s breasts and ass starts to expand to even out with the belly. Julie slowly starts to fill from the middle. Her midsection starts to round out slowly; she began to look a cross from a two month pregnant woman and a slowly expanding water balloon. She begin to feel the weight of her growing water balloons and slowly starts to stagger as she tries to keep herself standing with the water’s weight that grows inside of her. Her hips expand with her belly and ass as her legs starts to swell by the capacity. Alice and Kim began to notice a slight and slow movement from the skirt. Now her hips, thighs, belly and ass are trying to round out; her belly and breasts just made contact and her breasts starts to widen. After twenty seconds of hearing pleasure moaning from Julie and the deepening hissing from the flowing water, Julie’s body began to round out like a big water balloon in a big wedding dress with a head, arms and thick legs.
Without warning to Alice and Kim, Julie falls backward by the weight of the water in her. She slightly vomited some water but kept the rest back. Some of the water escaped from her. Now Alice and Kim got a good view of what is going on. Kim said to Alice, “Luckily I tie her down. She’ll be back on her feet later on.†Alice responds, “Good, but that is a good view though. Let’s move around to get a good view from a different angle.†Kim nods and the girls get up and split to get a different view. Alice looks from the left side and Kim looks from the right; they move around in circles around the growing bride. Kim gets a close up on Julie and pokes her belly; she hears the deep hissing of water and see Julie’s belly jiggle like a water bed. Kim can easily tell it is ticklish by the rapid muffled laughter from Julie. Alice revisits the skirt and grips the hose; Kim notices that Julie blushes, but did not know about Alice. Alice moves the hose around, by reflex, Julie gasps and grunts with each shock movements from the hose as her face became more red and relaxed. Alice checks the rope and notices that it is not slacking anymore; Julie starts to rise.
Kim notices Julie rising while she was hugging the giant water balloon. Both Alice and Kim moves away as the bride rounds out into a water ball. Her arms are slowly being swallowed by the bulging body; her legs are being swallowed as well, spreading by the unavoidably bulging belly, hips and ass. Kim and Alice back off as Julie rolls back onto her feet. Julie’s water-filled body jiggles and swishes as Julie finally got back on her feet. Julie moans as her massive jiggling body’s weight forced the hose deeper into her. She now looks like a giant garlic bulb in a bridal gown that is filling into a giant onion with a wedding dress. Kim and Alice circles around Julie like a scene of the big blue girl; they don’t wanting to miss anything. Alice pokes at Julie’s belly as she listens to the jiggling water in the water inflated bride and hugs the growing belly. Kim backs up and charges; she rams into the giant water balloon and bounces off like a rubber ball. Alice saw that and laughs; Julie laughs with Alice. After ten seconds, Julie felt her feet leaving the ground; Alice felt the lift as well.
Alice and Kim back off and see their friend’s body is now rounding into a sphere. Kim walks to the faucet and get ready to shut it off. Alice stays close and listens for any sign of a problem. Five seconds later, Alice quickly hears a creak and signals Kim; Kim shut the water off. Julie looks like a perfect sphere… a jiggling water ball, but still a sphere. The only thing visible is her head, hands and feet. Her red silk panties are now visible in plain view; Alice notices something about it that she hardly noticed. Under the black heart is a pink script text saying, “Love me there†with an arrow pointing down. Alice circles around and sees a white bold text saying, “Touch me here†with arrows point left and right. Alice asks, “You like sex a lot; do you?†Julie blushes wildly; she does. Kim says to Alice as she hugs the water balloon Julie, “All we need is blue paint and a paint sprayer, and then we have a good shot for our camera phones.â€Â
Alice holds up one finger and gives that genius look, she got an idea. Alice is known to be the genius of the squad and never fails to get what the squad wanted. She began making snapshots of the water balloon bride. She made every angle possible and starts tapping her camera phone. Kim looks and sees something on the screen. Kim asks Alice, “Alice, Adobe Photoshop and Animator in your camera phone? How you got that?†Alice responds, “It is a special hack I used to get us to Miami long ago. Remember when Julie turned into a human bubblegum in front of our manager?†Kim laughs and says that it took a long time for Julie to return to normal from being chewable and pink. Alice climbs onto Julie just to reach Julie’s head. She shows the pictures and animations of “Julie Beauregard†to Julie, relaxing on her soft water bed friend; Julie laughs about the sequences and random sprites appearing.
A male voice shouts, “Honey! What the heck are you thinking?†Julie looks and it was Alan. Julie shouts back, “Doing what I like! I’m living large!†Julie gives a smile as she blushes. Shocked Alan asks, “How come the dress did not break?†Julie answers, “I had it custom made to stretch.†Alan approaches his gigantic newly wedded wife and feels the over hydrated belly. Julie giggles by Alan’s ticklish touch. Alan goes around and feels the red silk panties. Julie blushes about the ass touch. Alan returns in front of Julie. Alan crosses his arms and calmly says, “The the text on the back of your panties make you look fat.†Julie narrows her eyes. Alice growls and Kim glares by the comment. Three days later, Alan’s brother found Alan hanging by his underwear… on the cross on top the main spire of the church. Alan’s Parents received divorce papers from Julie at the same day.
Fin
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