Rick McGuffin, Private Investigator

Just uploaded my new story to the library; it'll be live when Luther gets a chance to approve it. I'm eager to hear people's reactions, as it was not my normal writing style; I tried something different, and it turned out to be a bit longer and more involved than most of my stuff. 

Many thanks to klaeresource for his sage editing advice and to Cyndi Irresistible for getting me out of a story jam with a great plot suggestion.

Inflate123
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Here it is: http://bodyinflation.org/node/28186 Any feedback, good or bad, is appreciated. I'm a bit insecure about some of the narrative choices I made.

klaeresource

The Critics, good and bad.

Inflate123
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That about covers it. :)

ritties

Wow, great story.  One of your best!  Do I smell a series developing!  Thanks, thoroughly enjoyed it.

darth_clone19
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Very classical, I loved it.

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SvenS
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I liked the voice you wrote it in.  You were able to generate a lot of sympathy for the main character with the betrayal of trust and the iminent danger he faced as a lab rat.