Get rid of the kid character and use an adult of either gender and it will be acceptable.
Help with story ideas
I have this idea for a story that I would like other people's opinion on. I want to know if the character should be male or female or if he should inflate with water or air. Feel free to leave any other opinions.
"The Ballooning Nightmare"
A male inflation story that involves an unseen negative force that puts the main character through a number of unsettling events before suddenly inflating him.
A quick run down of the story: He is first walking along a foggy beach where he walks past a random kid. But when the balloon popped when he walked by, the boy turned around staring at him with a grave expression.Creeped out, he walks back home to get away but is followed by an evil entity. After a series of unexplained events, he begins to see a red balloon and becomes surrounded with them in the kitchen. He starts to pop the balloons with a knife where they explode with a red gunk-like liquid. He comes to realize that the gunk is wrapping his body beneath his clothes and tries to wash them off but to no avail. Then (if in the shower) the shower head falls off and jabs into his mouth inflating him with hot water. He explodes, but then wakes up in the morning realizing that it was all a dream... or so it seems.
Thu, 10/24/2013 - 02:06
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Thu, 10/24/2013 - 10:09
#4
Agreed about being rid of the kid, I'm always preferable of a female protagonist but you're the one writing the story either what you decide or the masses decide.
Thu, 10/24/2013 - 20:21
#5
The entity can take shape of whatever it wants so I can get rid of its kid form easily and make it into a cat or just a red balloon floating in place.
Fri, 11/29/2013 - 09:17
#6
Inflate123
Write it both ways; complete the story with male, then go back and do a second version and change the gender to female. Adjust any descriptions accordingly. See which one feels right. You'll know.
If you don't wind up having a preference, release both versions.
I, for one, am always on the hunt for male inflation, so my vote would definitely be for a male protagonist.
The story itself seems like it could be pretty good, if you think you can pull off the horror aspect of it as well as the inflation. My one concern with it is the "it was all a dream" ending, because that's dreadfully overused. Still, there's a workaround for everything, I suppose.
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