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Hi im well ill say my web name big and im gonna tell you bout the worst day of my life. It was a hot summer day I was wearing a tanktop with a hoddie and some jeans with flip flops. Me and my girlfriend max were cruising round the mall wen we were aproached by a lady.She worked for a nice pastry shop in the mall and asked us to try some of there new doghnuts. Unfortunately we said yes. Max was given a small round cherry doghnut as I was given a small round doghnut ball.

" What kind of doughnut is this " I said

" One to help people lose weight " the clerk responded

We tasted the pastries then gave our opinions. Maxes only complaint is that the doghnut didn't have enough toping and mine was that the doghnut made me feel really bloated and sick. I looked down to se a mound starting to grow. Max the clerk and me gasped. My belly drooped down and my belly started to peek out of my hooddie and tanktop. My legs started to get fatter and doughier as a crowd gathered.  Max poked my belly as it jiggled and continued to grow. I unzipped my hoodie and slid it off so it wouldn't rip. People started to poke my big fat bluber as it shook and quiverd.  I snapped out of my growth as a faint help sliped through my mouth before...CREEK...POP my pants button burst off. My but balloned to the size of 2 beach balls squished together and my belly grew the size of a beach ball and exercise ball together.soon I was a ball with hands and feet with a head. My pant had burst off andmy undies and tanktop was left. The people started to roll and play with me while I was still growing. Max tried to stop them but they turned it into a game I was as round as a ball and as big as 2 origanil violets. Finally inflation rehab came just as my tank top gave. And I have a few storys bout my time there if you wanna hear em but youll have to let me know thats also how I got mynickname any who thats all bye