Quality of the text often requires another pair of eyes to read it through and ruthlessle expose all the mistakes.
Let's have a proofreading club. People who are interested in reading stories before they are published and helping authors to improve.
I'm in need for some help with my brand new 99% finished text. I don't mind helping others too. Just be polite and please share the text in some cloud service for text-sharing. We are living in the XXI century. Sending word files by email is meh.
Inflation and English-wise it's very well written, but I'm no proofreader, sorry ^_^
may I suggest using professional services, not just a random native speaker. A professional would translate the context, not merely the text, substituting our associations and memes, fears and gags with those familiar to text's audience
Professional proofreaders may be not attuned to the kink. And be disgusted. :)
And that's my story. Male inflation (female inflators). Popping. Some surreal universe. A bit of drama and a tiny hint of romance.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1r7aEG9GMd93eUZvqWgZLnLiOCMPhf8kpj1e2FnI9Oq8/edit?usp=sharing
If you just go via link, you can propose changes. If you have a Google email, I can promote you to the title of editor and give rights to directly modify the text.